adriangarcia

I sit here wondering why Seeing all these people passing by The rush and the hurry to get somewhere, Never taking the time to stop and care You've give up ...

Inside my sunny garden, planted down below, There is a damaged hungry flower, That Spring will never know. My favorite!!! This was actually really, really good!.. and, it was well ...

I'm on the fence with this. I hate the subject matter, because I feel it's a bit.. contrived when it's written about. Maybe contrived is the wrong word. However, you ...

I wrote this 2 years ago, and I just found it. Just one wish, is all I want. Just a chance, to be all I'm not. The wish to live ...

I see myself as crippled Tripping over body fat and corpses of my cat Innocent in conquest, but at the same time Mordrid himself I’d name my child that but ...

This is too confusing and vague to mean anything, at least, for the reader. I have no idea why you brought school up. I have no idea why you want ...

Hmmm .... I can't quite put my finger on it, but this poem seems odd and boring to me. In comparison to the last poem I critiqued of yours, this ...

As the moon melts away the last drop of day’s heat, summer slumber no longer beckons. The world turns inside out with the carelessness of neon lights and scarlet cocktail ...

I understand the metaphor with the form, different ways of reading, and, in full, the effect of everything together. However, it's confusing and not as well-presented as it needs to ...

Beautiful Poem! I've yet to read a poem this developed on the forums! Well done! However, before I go into depth about this poem, I will say I'm bias towards ...

It was alright. The rhyming was unexpected but refreshing. However, since "bleeded" is not a word, it detracts the reader from the poem. I stopped reading for five minutes to ...

I'll say this ... You worked entirely too hard. It almost seems that you wrote it ... then used a Thesaurus. Because some lines are too confusing to follow. The ...

Hmmm ... I am not a fan of the structure. It makes it hard to read and, surprisingly, boring! Though, you use words well. I enjoyed them. But try a ...

I have to say that I preferred the last last stanza over all of them! In fact, I would have built a poem around the this beach ... Rather, then ...

Sleep comes when I shut my eyes. I go to a place where I might fly-- where I almost never cry. A place I could meet that one guy-- Somewhere ...