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this was a little dry and many of the rhymes seemed forced (example: day---may). you have a lot of problems with subject/verb agreement (rain vs. rains). i would go over ...

after reading the first stanza, i thought the rest of them would rhyme too so it was a bit of a surprise when they didn't. i liked the idea of ...

I liked it and it's really good for a first, but you really should try more punctuation and less capitalization. at this point, it's just confusing. I also might suggest ...

I didn't like it very much. It was fine, but it was empty. It seemed like you were going a little over the top. I get writers' block too, but ...

That was quite good, I thought. The lighting ideas were very well thought out. I especially liked the end with the "Merry Christmas" sign. I have to say, it was ...

wooooahhhhh. that was very nicely done. i was really taken aback and impressed by the pattern. it was really cool. to my pleasure, i found no technical problems. there are ...

i liked this a lot. the rhyme scheme is good but you need to work on the rhythm. actually, the only thing i disliked about this was your intro which ...

i really really liked how you trick the reader into thinking it's just a girl with a crush on a guy and it turns out they are in a play ...

hmmm. i wasn't crazy about it. there were a lot of grammar mistakes so you might want to go through and proofread and the story line left a little bit ...

nice job. i really like the message this poem sends (duh). there's this girl in my chorus who is reeeally really pretty and she's a senior and she smokes so ...

nice poem. i would like to see the rest of it though. you used good imagery and lot's of analogies but what, exactly, do you mean when you say that ...

i really enjoyed your poem. the pattern of each stanza was really quite fascinating and it was very deep. i didn't like the end though. first off, i wouldn't start ...

nice poem! k, a few suggestions. in the first stanza i might change In the night, under the moon, The stars in the sky shine out and bloom. Fireflies dance ...

nice job! i like the sort of laid back rhyme scheme. the one major piece of advice i have for you is to keep the mid-stanzas the same (the little ...

wow. that was really fascinating. it was a bit confusing at times cause i couldn't figure out who was talking but it was really fun to read once i got ...