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Re: Just A Kiss
this is very interesting, I see emotion behind it and a lot of thought. on the surface this seems very meaningless, but hides truth and realization. even though you don't ...
Jan 17, 2020 -
Re: Virus: Prologue: the first letter
Thank you so much. Chapter one is in process but I have several stories going as well as my fiance and are I are planning our wedding so it will ...
Sep 11, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 3: Smoke from The Ice
I will get into that later on but she had come in contact with with it in one of her helios raids on a human inhabited planet. Each mind is ...
Sep 8, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 3: Smoke from The Ice
I wont adress everything but i will Adress one point you made. Iris. In chapter 2 she was introduced. She acts the way she does because she is a half ...
Sep 8, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 4: Roses
Also thank you for the review. I have not had time to read it all through but i will when I have a chance
Sep 6, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 4: Roses
Im not gonna cover everything here. Just a few things that stood out major. For the first third person shifts. I write slightly different, In this story the two main ...
Sep 6, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 2: Devil in the Light
Thank you for the tips and review. I have two things to say. 1. The technical language was introduced in chapter 1 but i will review all my chapters now ...
Sep 5, 2019 -
Re: The Door To Nowhere: Chapter Two: The truth about Nowhere
Hello and thank you for the review. Im sorry i took a while to reply as I read this when you first reviewed and I was like eh I'll reply ...
Sep 3, 2019 -
Re: Chapter 9: Tunnel
Sorry phone glitched and not sure how to delete
Aug 26, 2019 -
Re: Chapter 9: Tunnel
I have not read the rest of the chapters, so all I am Reviewing is this part alone. To start off Im not a fan of this tense. I just ...
Aug 25, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 5: Memories
This isnt to argue or say your wrong, but the scene about his dad is very important for a later chapter. I understand your points and view overall on this ...
Aug 25, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 4: Roses
As far as the Biohearts go, I'm going to circle back to that in a later chapter. I have 6 and seven already written just havent dropped it. Without spoilers, ...
Aug 25, 2019 -
Re: The last pilot chapter 3: Smoke from The Ice
All i can say is if you want to check out SAOP novel (Sword art online progressive. ) the way the author writes is Kirito is in first and Asuna ...
Aug 25, 2019 -
Re: Love Affair
Um so because i dont put a poem on this means I don't write poetry? Cool nice to know guess all my poems are fake then %uD83D%uDC4C
Aug 18, 2019 -
Re: Virus: Prologue: the first letter
All i can say to this is, you have to wait. All those questions have answers coming
Aug 16, 2019