Zibbie

Hi Rekats I'm a newbie too :) This story is a breath of fresh air. I LOVED it. I don't even have any nitpicks, which i know must be disappointing, ...

I like! it has a good plot, like a serial liar or something. Anyways nitpicks... She was trying to flirt with. me no period between with and me seated at ...

hi Butterfly! Okay i started reading and first thing i see... Your story starts with I looked out of the window it was raining that is not going to get ...

Hi Zib here to review Okay i really liked this because it was super descriptive and had a good flow. Just some parts that were hard to understand, but maybe ...

hi Pawprint! Okay so i like the mysterious feel this prologue sets up, and i can tell its going to be an interesting story. I (sorry seraphtree) like that she ...

Oohhh i like this chapter even better than the first. Not much action, but the dialogue was great. each a bump, darn it!” Anita said i would have rather she ...

Really like this story! im glad its featured (how does that happen by the way?) anyways a word just caught my attention... Cassie giggled quietly at his sombre reaction. sombre ...

Hi BeautifulDoom, I also love these kind of stories, It's like falling for the bad boy. First off... those dark eyes that forever hold the gleam of meannes Im not ...

Hi Esther! I really like the plot for this story, and in the end i was still curious and wanting to read more. Here are some things i noticed... He ...

I really liked this one! i just saw the title of the chapter two you posted, so i went to go read chapter one because it looked like a catchy ...

hi Tomothy_mayhem :) Im zib Okay so i love the story as a whole, and it has a really strong plot. But there were some parts i read and i ...

Hey! i really liked the story. there were some parts that needed better punctuation like Stella mentioned, but overall it seemed quite interesting. though this line caught my attention "I ...

wow this is sooo good. It almost gave me chills. I really love the imagery this whole poem creates, and the language you use is so stimulating, my favorite verse ...

I really liked how you introduced all the characters in the first paragraphs. It sets up the story nicely. I also liked the beginning and end. Especially how you ended ...