Yuriiko

Hello there again, WW! Here as requested. Comments and suggestions in RED . ^^ JoJo hesitated before going into her next class, science. It was her favorite class, but today, ...

Hello there, WW! Here to review. I have actually decided to read this chapter for a better understanding of your story before reading the chapter three. So anyway, I thought ...

Hello there, Retro. Oh, my. I'm terribly sorry for your loss. It made me to remember a book I was reading a while ago, and forgive me, it had the ...

Hello there, Emmy! Here to review. My only critique here is how the woman died. I mean, she says that the train station was very dangerous but she didn't seem ...

Hello there King! Here to review. I looked into the eyes of death , and he asked me if I was scared. I don't know what I fear more, death ...

Hello there Kaka! Here to review. Forgive me if you see my review vague since I've written this at night and for repetitions too, if ever. First off, two point ...

Hello there Jamie! Here to review. Corrections in RED . The next, she could not feel or think or move. Try lessening on the word "or". It's somewhat annoying because ...

Hello there! Here to review. The poem you have here is pretty sweet and good. And I honestly have to say that I seldom ignore my pet whenever I'm not ...

Hello there, BG! Here to review. My dreams are haunted by nightmares. Images of terror and despair. I don't like the second sentence, though I could understand it but still, ...

Hey there! Here as requested. I haven't noticed any grammatical errors here, maybe because I think this is pretty well-written. Though I agree with Anger in some particular terms. It's ...

Hello there, Nicchaos! Here as requested. First of all, I have to agree with Abigail's suggestion; you might want to move this under "Other" poetry. It's because the format of ...

Hey there Kyou! Here to you-know-it. Seeing that SporkPunk has pretty much covered up those grammatical mistakes, I'm not going to get picky with it anymore. After finishing bandaging her, ...

Hello there! Here to review as requested. So I read your first chapter, which I suppose is in 'media res' and that you planned to make another chapter (this one) ...

Hello there! Here as requested. :wink: First of all, I just want to welcome you again to YWS. How are you enjoying so far? I think this is your first ...

Hello there, Jemjive! Here as requested. :wink: First of all, the concept behind this is 'sugary' but cliche'. Though I suspect if you have written this story well, it would ...