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Kyllorac, to be honest i didn't like this. i don't want to sound mean, but to me it was like four lines about some random needing to pee. Whether you ...

Good start. You're writing is clear and easy to follow which is good I'm looking forward to reading more, and by the way i love the title, i can already ...

it's good, but maybe try to explain it more somehow, i just don't really understand what this poem is about

this story sounds interesting but try to use more descriptive language and sensory detail, it will help grab the reader's attention. all in all good job keep it up!

wait what do you mean new title, new name? has this idea already been done? I spent ages trying to think of something origional, such a shame. what is assassins ...

thanks for advice

thankyou, i thought it was very origonal

good job Nargles!! i can't spot any other grammar issues that others have already. Except don't be afraid to use apostrophies e.g it is = it's only because sometimes the ...

Hey this is a really sweet poem. there's a few spelling erros like *whishes* should be wishes. but other than some minor gramatical problems, it's very well written and i ...

This is amazing Libby!!!!!!!! How do you even think of phrases like that. My favourite is stanza 5 it 's very well written. Overall well done, but I'd maybe change ...

Thanks for the tips guys, I'll edit out the the parts you suggested and I may fiddle around with some of the words but do you guys know how to ...

This is amazing!!! -you could become a poet if you ever wanted to- xxx from you know who.