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Nice, but just a few things...- Delicate little flakes, so beautifully they flutter, - this seems a bit.. awkward to say. Maybe you could say something entirely different, or try ...

Nice poem. It's just a little hard to read/review. Like someone said, maybe you could shorted the lines or use different wording. For example- “Being a teenager is like passing ...

Nice. This like a love rectangle, right? You like someone that likes someone that likes someone else?.. ( by " you" i mean the narrator) I 'm watching you watching ...

the poem here, u could hav added a little more. who is it ur talkin about? why do u love him/her so much? how much did he pay you to ...

Really, really deep. I loved it. Just a few things. And the winner is . . . Really, who cares? Force-fed views from the judges in their chairs. Reality TV ...

Really nice poem. Wonderful piece. Just one thing... ... This country, a place of brotherhood among free men, is being ruled by those with the gems. - Maybe you could ...

Nice comparison- A girl (you liked?)and a game of cards.I am guessing this a rejection story...just guessing. **If you capitalized those words for a reason, disregard my corrections :D While ...

Beautiful. Just a few key points. Who is that who wears the red mask to hide her face ? It seems a little redundant when you say " hide her ...

Nice, but just a few things. It seems like you could have added a little more detail or something. Maybe another stanza to let us know why? or how? or ...

Really deep. Just one thing- Simple defiance was all it was, an attempt to fight the impossible ? . Is that what you meant or was it attempt to fight ...

Whoa, okay, let's try starting with grammar. Here are a few writing tips, first of all... 1. No chat speak.non. whatsoever. Never in Literature. 2. "I" is ALWAYS capitalized. Always. ...

Nice start, but just s few things. First off, let's add a few spaces- He had driven for quite a long time and he knew that if he kept going ...

I am a little confused as to what you are trying to say... Grammar is in bold. "Lost," I tell myself, " L ost, but can be found again, that's ...

Beautiful Poem. I just made a few suggestions. ( I am not trying to force you into anything) I hear the whispers in my ear, they try to avoid my ...

Nice. Grammar is in bold . Here I lie again in this dark night the shadows my only friend heart broke n? here I lie again alone in this night ...