Wulie

I liked the second one - though it was a bit repetative for you age it is amazing how you write really it is yet again we need more imagry... ...

if we're taking age as something to go by I think it was well done for you age however. It was bland it doesn't start or end if you get ...

I liked it - you picked a subject which is all to familiar. To be honest I thought it was quite good but hey I'm most proberlly wrong :)! love ...

lol - cheers I guess thats something

lol I feel I may just write this poem off as one of those poems never to be seen again :)!

get me out of these chains free me from this guilt this pain Why am I made to watch these memories? the button stuck on repeat this is also quite ...

Thank you soo much of course inc you're always write about what you say! and I shall when I have time go over all of my poem however at the ...

I absolutley love it I really do as like brads poerty its so different and ahhh I just really love it, the wordsyou use are beautiful!!! wu x

It sounds a little to chopping and as the others have said forced due to the constant ryhming but you've got a great idea with the poem and I liked ...

After re-deading I agree it seems to be very forced on my part the start I like then it becomes all to clicheeee ay hoo I'm giving writing a brake ...

I agree.... is all I can say lol. thanks

Thank you :)! I really do enjoy reading you comments! Wu

Thank you all very much for your comments on my poem I will now make some adjustments! love wu x

I'm sorry but this poem doesn't grab me either its just too fast but good job for trying Wu x

this was a lovely poem I really enjoyed the words you used and I have nothing pertically bad to say abot it however it was a tad long and the ...