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Re: Blured Lines
I have to agree with bubblewrapped here... Firstly, as bubblewrapped said, it seemed like just word-building. You were throwing out a bunch of contrasts and it seemed as if they ...
Oct 4, 2005 -
Re: Eldest
I just recently started Eragon and am really enjoying it for the most part. I wasn't extremely impressed with his writing quality (which really disappointed me because, being a bestseller, ...
Sep 30, 2005 -
Re: The chaos children: Pt 3
Canthor lunged at Agron with great force and wrapped his hands around his head with a powerful (Good description here, but I would suggest more. Make Canthor dangerous, frightening. 'With ...
Sep 23, 2005 -
Re: Lost and Forgotten
I thought this was interesting, pretty good, but it seemed a little cliche... I'll let my crit speak for itself. I'm a seascape you painted Look closely, amid the blues ...
Sep 23, 2005 -
Re: Prologue
A prologue by the prologue slayer :wink: Anyways, I have to say I agree with Snoink and Erethror. The information is good to know for the story, but I'm sure ...
Sep 12, 2005 -
Re: Fly
Okay... this was... interesting, It didn't really touch me and didn't seem to really have a powerful point, but I guess I will critique it... Fly (Okay, firstly, this title ...
Sep 9, 2005 -
Re: Who do you think you are anyway?
I have to say I agree with comments above... It seemed like someone was just venting emotions in random ways instead of trying to create a poem out of it. ...
Sep 8, 2005 -
Re: You Were Hard Work Today
I have to say that I agree with Chevy here. It wasn't terribly boring and awful, but it had me just sitting there, staring at the screen with no real ...
Sep 6, 2005 -
Re: Dying.... revised again...
My thoughts basically echo those of aboce. Your last few stanzas were great; I really enjoyed, but your first stanza made me wince a little. Are you really going to ...
Sep 5, 2005 -
Re: Risking Raindrops
I thought this was pretty good. When I first read, I wasn't sure what I thought of it because it's not my style, but after reading it again, it is ...
Sep 4, 2005 -
Re: hopelessly untitled
I thought this had some very good word uses and overall, I liked it, but the rhythm bugged me. I understand that not all poems should rhythm, but with your ...
Sep 4, 2005 -
Re: Blank Paper (aka Writers Block)
It describes Writer's Block so well, I couldn't help but to like it... blank except for the words I mean to write; empty except for the torrent of good ideas ...
Sep 4, 2005 -
Re: Brown Eyes
I thought this was interesting, but I can't say I really liked it. Firstly, it seemd a little... I dunno... too SIMPLE. Don't take me wrong, simple is not usually ...
Aug 31, 2005 -
Re: Acoustic guitars and firelight
As PsyLynx said, the beginning was really good; I enjoyed how you painted a picture that brought me to the moment; I could almost see the scenes you described, but ...
Aug 24, 2005 -
Re: The Gate (Old, Old Horrid Poem.)
I actually enjoyed this. It was very interesting and really intrigued me. The only things I didn't like were your usage of the word 'smashed'. I'm sorry, but 'smashed the ...
Aug 24, 2005
