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This has some really powerful, haunting parts which I really liked, but it also had some parts I think need work. Really very beautiful though! Very nice work, Chandni! Caught ...

I must say I agree with Roland and what he said, but besides that, I did have a few suggestions... I am shielded by darkness I grow upon the fears ...

This was very creative and elegant as PsyLynx mentioned. As you warned, it was a bit off-rhythm, but I believe that can be fixed. I feel so cold and lifeless ...

I agree with Once Upon a Dream. The beginning story part was a good lead into he last part, but in the last part, the powerful emotions you were leading ...

I really liked your description of the cold winds and how the ice turns to stone. I really enjoyed this poem. The only thing that bothered me was the 2nd ...

This was interesting; kind of hard to understand, but interesting nevertheless A cat and mouse set sail, getting drenched in the rain. The cat had inflicted the mouse so much ...

Yeah, it just didn't catch you. It seemed to just be a story; it needs more emotion. Instead of telling the story, try including more of the girl's emotions and ...

As Triona said, it lacked the emotion to grip me. You have some good ideas here You can’t tell, but I love you more then you know I might be ...

Yeah, Jack and Sureal are right... no apostrophe on 'its' Anyways, on to the poem... Firstly, I agree with Jack that this isn't exactly original. It needs more imagery and ...

I really liked the message here... it's so true. Here's a well-earned critique for ya. In the moment of grief I was numb to the pain Running deep to the ...

Em, it's pretty good; I like the image, but I do have a few critiques Stars in the sky (an okay start, but if you described the sky and stars, ...

This had a dreamy feel to it; I thought it was quite good but I do have some suggestions Daydreams and distant memories Whisk my heart in light so sweet. ...

I liked this a lot. It instilled this feeling that made me just want to reach out and help the person in need. A very good job. The few things ...

Very nicely done. The only thing that remotely bothered me were the verbs in your firstline. I don't know why, but they seemed kind of awkward, especially suck, but that ...

My thoughts echo those above. The rhyming was too forced. You don't have to rhyme and if you do, you need to really think about the words you use before ...