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I liked this piece a lot! I only found a couple quick errors. "none the less the country" I think 'never mind the country' would sound better here. None the ...

So, usually I do a lot of nit-picking, but I think most of the stuff I was going to say was already pointed out. I'm just going to reiderate the ...

This is definitely an interesting idea. I'm just curious about the title. You call them runaways, but are they really runaways or possible orphans? Be careful of mixed tenses. You ...

I haven't read the first part of this but I definitely want to! It seems very fun. Your characters are totally relatable and I love that. There are only a ...

Sorry if this seems a little brutal, but I'm just trying to help. First of all, I agree with pinkangel that you should probably brush up on some of your ...

Hi, ovbiously I'm WritersBlock and I'm here to pick at your piece, but luckily I didn't find much to possibly change :) so let's get started! The animal moved silently, ...

This is really fantastic and I hope you keep writing, but I do have a few things to pick at. There was a sweet aroma, full of spices and honey ...

Your grammar and spelling are very good and the story is interesting. I'm just going to pick at a couple of things: "long a go" this is one word " ...

Although it will be redundant and hypocritical(since I'm a description maniac), I will once again point out the amount of description. It's not all bad, but there might be a ...