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Thanks Azila! :D *le glomps* I've decided that I am going to use this as the beginning of my story, so now....on to the editing! *sinister playing of the piano* ...

Sorry it took me so long - I was just un-grounded. :P Ding! You should probably put that in italics, seeing as its a noise. I spread some butter on ...

cat4prowl -- Sorry I've been so behind - being grounded had me crippled. :P The crowd was rippling with anticipation, seeming to swell with impatience, all around me, excited voices ...

Thanks for the crit! :D Yeah, I'm not sure which kind of poetry this is. Heck, I don't even know if this is poetry. :lol: (I'll fix the quotes, lol.) ...

Yeah, ditto on that. Edward is such a _______.

Wow, thanks for the crit! I really appreciate how you actually gave example from books and such for support. That was immensely helpful - I'll work on the ABA/AAB pattern ...

:D Yeah, you mentioned that you hated it. :oops: But I reviewed it nonetheless because it was the only piece that I felt I could actually say something constructive for... ...

Rtas - there's no point in me reviewing this because I'd just repeat what you've already heard. But I'm really sorry for my earlier comments...I sounded sooo mean. Don't take ...

Where is it? Ah, it's a download. Why, though? Usually, people only have those in the 'Advanced Critiques' forum. Well...I was going to critique it, but the download won't work. ...

Thanks! Wow, my little 'ole piece is getting tons of review today! And oh yeah...I probably should change it to 'lie'. Lol.

Thanks! :D The piece is meant to be vague, but I'll definitely fix the tenses. *smacks head* How could I have made so many stupid mistakes? While this juxtaposition of ...

Thanks canis! :) I am going to revise this...*shifty eyes* but not right now 'cuz I'm sneaking on the computer...I'm still grounded. >.

Thanks! :) I was wondering why it didn't work before, and now I'll definitely go have a look. ^_^ Oh, and I made the edit, but I didn't post it ...

Thanks a million Ning! I love the 'naked eye', so I'll definitely change that. :) And sure, I'll PM you. Heh. I have a feeling that I'm about to be ...

Well, they do die. Quite often. :P And aren't the people in your book un-aging too? Well, now that I've defended myself; thanks! :)