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lol I started laughing so hard when I read this...right in the middle of Computers class! That is really a cool story! I loved it! All of the grammatical errors ...

My comments are in bold. I've underlined and/or barred out some of your writing and then commented underneath: Chapter Three “ What do you want Cory? I thought I told ...

Shadows cast over my dreams No more time to pick teams The warmth that I love Flies off with the last black dove As my heart turns to stone It ...

Are you a songwriter? That's cool :D Well anyways, here's my review: It's not bad for a 10 year old. If I am correct, the multiple letters are meant to ...

Ha! Sorry about that, but I just started maniacally when I read how the poem killed the spider. *giggles nervously* But anyways, the poem was awesome. Kind of emo in ...

Wow! That was really good! I've reviewed some of your other poetry, and by now I've come to recognize your style. You're one of the few people [on YWS] who ...

Wow. That's all I can say...just wow. All in all, that was a very nice bit of writing. A little cliche, but I don't care too much about stuff like ...

(My comments are in italics and your writing is in bold ) All was silent. Not the nice silence that makes you feel calm and comforted, but the dark eerie ...

As always, SeraphTree beat me to it. I agree with all the nit-picks she mentioned, and I can't seem to find anything else that bothered me. I can, however, provide ...

hmm, not bad. I like how it doesn't rhyme (you have no idea how bad some of the rhyming poems are on YWS). By the way, Welcome to YWS! You ...

I agree. I first finished the series in grade 4, but I have re-read them many times. Instead of getting more dull, they seem to be more captivating each time ...

The brown leaves from the dying trees bristle stiffly, occasionally fluttering down around the old fashioned station building like wounded bats. --------------------- I couldn't help but laugh at the

I really liked the book, a little better than the movie anyways. What really bugged me was the plot, though. When I read it for the first time I didn't ...

Oh, god. A rhyming poem. I...don't like those kinds of poems... *hides behind a riot shield* I get the feeling that you were forcing yourself to find a rhyming pattern, ...

I agree with lyrical_sunshine :D At first I was like 'Wow, Edward sounds real neat.' But as the series progressed I began to think things like, 'No one can be ...