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Hey there! :) I can see you're new to YWS. Just so you know, you shouldn't post more than once a day, because it clogs up the forums with your ...

*sigh* Umm... Firstly, you've posted a lot of your "work" here on YWS and for every piece you submit, you need to do at least two critiques. There's 16 things ...

:twisted: Harsh review comin' right up! I have to say that I'm a little disappointed, ning. What started of as a very fun and promising story...well, you get the point. ...

Wow, this is really powerful! Usually I dislike pieces written in 2nd person, but I think it helped here to convey the emotion and I just...liked it. :P Now, on ...

Haha, this is awesome! Snoink must be the only thing ever that rhymes with oink. This is so cute...sorry I couldn't be of any help, but it IS a limerick. ...

It's about time I reviewed something of yours, Gryphon! seems that everyone has covered it...but maybe I'll just review it as a first-time reader, and forgive me for repeating what's ...

CAUTION: I may as well just slap you in the face - this review will be harsh. Harsh and honest. Read on at your own risk. gothgirl01 -- I'm sorry, ...

I’m wrapped in a blanket of eerie silence, it hugs me, whispering sweet nothings into my ears. I love that as an opening sentence, but the comma after 'silence' should ...

Echo to Colleen up there. ^_~ Seriously, listen to her. She knows what she's talking about - and I agree with absolutely everything that she said. However, this isn't all ...

>>> Review one of five >>> Very nice, canis! I'm a sucker for animal/native spirituality stories in general, but I especially like your 'Totems'. They just leave me with a ...

The sun had finally set, dipping below the horizon like a spoonful of lava. 'had' should be has, because the rest of the piece is written in the present tense. ...

It looks like grammar has already been addressed, but I have some of my own comments... This does sound a lot like Twilight. The whole thing with Taylor - I ...

(I've already read the first chapter) Instead of correcting all your grammar mistakes, I'll show you a few examples and hopefully you can fix them all. :wink: Mounds of snow ...

I've no criticism whatsoever. I've no long an inspired ramblings about grammar or tense or syntax. I've nothing to do but be absolutely useless and inform you that this was ...

Scared. That was what she felt. Ugh. As soon as I read this, I didn't want to read anymore. In any event, you've mixed up your tenses. I should be ...