Winterhawk393

I think it's fine as is, and doesn't need to be in iambic pentameter. I noticed one spelling error: you wrote "mockey" instead of "mockery." and yeah it is kind ...

alright, I really like your story. It's really intriguing and I love the names you picked. I'm also curious why these people were kept in cages and why there are ...

Okay for the most part your writing is good. There are no spelling mistakes and not too many grammatical errors. I'm just noticing an overuse of commas, which I'll get ...

I really like this poem. I love the word choice and the picture it creates in my head. It's simple yet elegant, and there are no spelling/grammar mistakes, which is ...

Alright where to start. There aren't too many problems or grammatical errors with your writing, which is a nice break for once. But you don't really use many adjectives. There's ...

okay this story is really intriguing, if not a bit confusing at first, but I'm sure it will be better explained once more chapters are posted. I like the whole ...

I really like this poem. I love the rhyming and word choice. I just have one correction for you: "You're radiance," - when you take out the conjugation it says ...