Winterhawk393

Okay so yerr bestie's here to give you a review ;) As always, your format of writing intrigues me. I was definitely hooked the entire time and wanted to know ...

Hey, it's Hawk again. This was pretty much flawless. I only have 2 grammatical things to mention that I saw: 1. I feel like many times you use a "-" ...

I.LOVED.THIS. so few typos, such great grammar and vocabulary. phenomenal description of the environment and action. i've always struggled with describing pain, but you nailed it. you found such great

okay seriously. this is like one of the best things i've ever read on here. not even joking. I loved absolutely all of it! You have this writing thing down! ...

Me again! Lots of good stuff to say about this chapter =) But first, as always, grammar: ""Oh." There was a pause, and then a soft, "Thank you," before Ayodele ...

i found this story very intriguing and unique so far! it was slightly confusing though. so Tattee is a girl correct? was she pretending to be a boy or something? ...

lolol I love the ending. sorry, I'm kind of morbid like that ;D I love that line: You didn't need her anymore. this is soooo original! i'm not sure if ...

interesting story. I agree with what the others said and have just a couple other pieces of advice. in the paragraphs that have no dialogue, try to avoid starting every ...

I like this. it's different than the typical hostage/bank robbery story. the beginning was kind of slow, but once she got into the bank I got that suspense building up, ...

I love the way this is written! your description of the men was FANTASTIC. and i'm super intrigued about the communication method/book. one thing I did notice though was that ...

to me this story was kind of cliché and unoriginal. it made me think of Van Helsing, especially when he prayed over the ashes. And honestly, no offense, but it ...

I really liked this story. in my opinion, English teachers grade wayyyy too hard and they nitpick every little thing, which is ridiculous. I feel like if it's a STORY ...

okay, sometimes this was a little confusing, but all in all I liked it. I like the vibe you had going, kind of creepy and mysterious and dangerous. i'm not ...

I agree with Anadir. I think this could make a great novel, though I'm totally with you on the whole starting a novel and never finishing it thing. then again, ...

hi. great story! I didn't read the first chapter because I'm too lazy to go look for it hahah. but I really liked this =D you have really good grammar ...