WinterGrimm

Each time it was re-told, the details grew more exaggerated, until the dead trio had been drug through the bars and savagely beaten, dying when their brains splattered on the ...

they black the sky black isn't really working for me as a verb. blacken the sky? when on of my sex not of my sex one of my sex? filling ...

I'd just like to start off by saying that this is honestly one of the best pieces of fiction I've seen on this site. Its clever, its clear, its vitually ...

The sun's radiance blessed this land, warmth was not great, but it sunk deep. I'm not sure that this means. It reads aloud very akwardly. Lemme give a shot at ...

While I don't think my feelings are as strong as your's Tess. Paris Hilton does tend to annoy the snot out of me. Athough she wasn't bad when she appeared ...

This poem sounds like a Linkin Park song. You can interpret that anyway you want. One quick little logistic thing. I have gotten this view for such a long time, ...

His face was down turned, "His face was turned downward," there's not a particular reason for this change. Just the phrase down turned rubs me the wrong way for a ...

the little girl with french braids Capitalize French Tyler gave in to his better judgement and began to speak judgment Quietly sipping her raspberry Italian Soda, Madeleine turned her head ...

Alright. Here' my critique of Chapter One. The night had been chosen well, as it was pitch black, no moon there to disrupt the advantage of darkness. as black as ...

warmed by the splash of light upon the floor cut upon the floor. just warmed by the splash of light its the glistening faery wings of spring as much as ...

...I didn’t make it to my stay room on board for about an hour after departure. Wordy consider revising. And there I stayed for a full sixty minutes. Consider cutting ...

If I were to have read this piece in a poetry anthology I would be suprised to hear that the one who wrote it is only 18 years old. It ...

I want to go through this story with a finer toothed comb at some point because like other people have said there are some good things in here. I have ...

Okay. There's a few things I have to mention first off. First paragraph: The word paper is in that first paragraph like four or five times. The fact that paper ...

I read Magician Apprentice and Master and loved them both. The third book I never finished because the sneaky guy went and changed main characters on me. I miss Pug ...