Wiggy

You know what, this is a really cliched poem, but I actually liked it! You've got a great, heartwarming topic here, but I think your problem is that you wrote ...

This poem confused me. Did she commit suicide? That's the impression I got, and it doesn't seem right because her age seemed very young in this poem-around 7, perhaps? You ...

All right! *rubs hands together* First off, congratulations on an excellent piece. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this (twice!!), and I'm glad you picked this as the piece you'd like me ...

This was a really cute poem! I think you need to work on your rhythm a bit-I don't have time for a full crit, stanza by stanza, but I think ...

Hey Tony! This was a really good piece. Fresh, uncliched, and interesting. I was riveted all the through. I liked your concept, though it WAS morbid and so sad! :( ...

I liked this section! Her reaction to Tom seemed a little...I don't know, unrealistic, and very, very rushed. It's kind of, "Oh, you're leaving, fine, I hate you!" Maybe draw ...

You have lots of choppy sentences, which add to the depressing feel of the whole entire piece you've posted so far. I went back and read all of the "silent ...

I really like this chapter. The only thing I would suggest is, besides a few minor punctuation errors, I would think Edna would be a bit more upset about her ...

I really need to read more of this! *pants* It was awesome! For the British woman, make her dialogue sound a bit more natural. For me, it was forced, but ...

This was...I don't know how to describe it. It was riveting at least, and I really liked your style. I'd say mysterious would be the word to describe it. The ...

This sounded more like an unrefined story than a poem. What was the point? I'm sorry to be so harsh, but this did absolutely nothing for me. Spice it up ...

I liked this! I'm not quite sure I got what the meaning of the poem was, but the rhythm was definitely catchy! I think the repetition of box actually enhanced ...

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I loved the topic of this poem. However, some of your verses were awkwardly constructed, such as: Why can’t you see, It was thee, I think you can see it, ...

Hmm, I'm going to have to disagree with the other two critiquers. I think you have a good idea here (what is coming of this world?), but you used so ...