Wherethewindgoes

Salutations. This is well-written with good grammar. I would suggest a few things: Firstly, I would move the description of hearing loss to the beginning, before the discovery is stated, ...

Salutations. One thing I worry about, having read this and sort-of skimmed the first two chapters, is that there hasn't really been anything to catch my attention as a reader. ...

Salutations. I haven't read the rest of the story, so I'm not sure whether some of these things are explained, but I was confused by a few things, such as ...

The two opposing viewpoints, I think, are interesting here. I don't know what the rest of the novel is going to be like, but I think you should make sure ...

I really like this poem. I don't have much to suggest, but here are a few things I noticed: Tell Me.. Is this how your supposed to feel? I really ...

Salutations. Different perspectives on things, I think, are always good. I wonder exactly what the goal of this poem is. Is this to say something about this event? Or is ...

I really like the beginning section. It gives an ominous-sort of feel to the story, with the threat of the main character becoming evil lurking throughout the story. Also, it ...

I really like the first couple lines about the meaning of the name. I think the "My name is" might be actually OK here because of the definition after it. ...

This is really interesting. I have not read the other parts, but I can see from this that the story has a lot of potential. I really liked character shown ...

This is a very interesting poem. I think you did a good job of not making the rhymes seem forced on most occasions. I'm not especially good at reviewing the ...

Well, I haven't read the rest of the story, so I can't really critique the story line or characters, and this far in you're probably pretty set in that regard. ...

Salutations. Firstly, I really like the title. I hope you go into more detail about it later. It seems DarkPandemonium has already critiqued the writing style, so I suppose I'll ...

So far, I'm intrigued by this and the first part. Elizabeth's sickness is interesting and brings immediate motivations and actions into the story. There are only a few things I ...

This is really well-written. Your descriptions are especially good, giving all the important information without over-describing. A few things I would suggest: Firstly, I agree with PurpleMoment that

Salutations. As AwesomeSauce said, this story has the potential to be a very exciting one of action and adventure. On this chapter I had a few thoughts. Firstly, just as ...