Wherethewindgoes

Hallo! So. This is really well-written, and a lot of the descriptions are really powerful. A few suggestions: A vibrant gush of oranges and reds dance across my bedroom walls. ...

Salutations! So, firstly, I like how you twisted the idea of the princess being rescued, taking a viewpoint on something that hasn't really been done before. A few thoughts: Firstly, ...

Salutations. Overall, the story has potential. The idea of her escaping from the government and such is interesting. The writing itself, though, needs a lot of corrections. " I want ...

Salutations. I have come hither to review! I like the poem, and I think the content is good. However, some of the lines do really well at conveying the meaning, ...

Salutations! I have come hither to review! So, the character here is well-done. Readers want characters like yours, who are proactive, who do things, as opposed to sitting around. They ...

Salutations. Firstly, I really liked this. The wording here conveyed and evoked a lot of emotion, and some of the lines here were really, say, eerie. I think this is ...

Salutations. I have come hither to review! So, the first thing I noticed about this was the title. I had to do a Google search for the word "wonderlust", and ...

Salutations. Welcome to YWS! I noticed one logistical problem in this piece: The laughing, or spotted, hyena is one of the two species of hyena that has been recorded as ...

Salutations. So, this is certainly a good start for a story, introducing aspects of the world and showing what may be in store for the future. A few suggestions: The ...

Salutations. So, the message of this poem is sound, and a lot of emotion is contained here, but I think in order to best channel that emotion and make others ...

Salutations. I have come hither to review, as requested. So, indeed, you do have a lot of information here about the character's past. A few things about that: 1) I'm ...

Salutations. I really like this story and the emotion portrayed in it, but I have a few grammatical suggestions. I'll go through the story and skip any parts that I ...

Salutations. The story is interesting so far, but I have a few corrections: But then again , my family could give you reasons to counter anything I said. “There is ...

Salutations. The story was kind of intriguing, but there were a lot of small grammatical mistakes. I'll try to find them all: Samuel awoke to the sound of his alarm ...

Salutations. You review a lot of my work, so I think it is only fair I return the favor. So, one thing I noticed was your sentence length. A lot ...