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Re: Letter from your Shadow
Hi, I like this poem but I picked up a few little mistakes. I fallowed you everywhere, Just a little type or spelling mistake, 'Fallowed' should be 'Followed' I’ll be ...
Nov 19, 2010 -
Re: Deleted
Hi, Okay firstly I really love this. I can't wait to read more. his green eyes stared a t me hard You forgot the a, easily done. All of the ...
Nov 14, 2010 -
Re: Life [Chapter 1]
Hi, I thought this was quite interesting. I stared at him. “So, to your eyes, I am nothing more than a, what did you say…Pretty Boy?” After "I stared at ...
Sep 26, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] The Artist
Firstly, I love this! It's brilliant! At first I was confused, but then I read on and got more and more excited! And addicted. You did though use I a ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: Mirror Image
I can relate easily to this Poem. Her family does not see All the scars on her arms They see nothing wrong With the girl all wrapped and twisted This ...
Aug 23, 2010 -
Re: the elementals (title curtosy of rocksmith)
Jose= a 18 year old guy with a little to obedient attitude and medium long jet black hair . EXETREMELY tall and slightly built body and has countless abilities concerning ...
Jul 10, 2010 -
Re: Just a little crazy...
I'll be working on punctuation :) I'm a little crazy, well, alot to be fair. That should be a lot, not alot and ill get all giddy over the sound ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: unamed short story.
She opened the book. You could add more detail here, it doesn't sound correct to me Her fingers fumbled within the familiar pages, fragile and frayed. I like the detail ...
Jun 15, 2010 -
Re: Only A Dream
That's such a beautiful poem, the words fit together perfectly. The way you stare at me, with your hypnotizing eyes, I fall deeper and deeper in love with you. Is ...
May 30, 2010 -
Re: Drifting
Firstly, such a beautiful poem! I loved it, at parts I did have to re-read. But other than that its Awesome! Drifting I lose my focus from the silver smudges ...
May 25, 2010 -
Re: Crazy *EDITED*
All You can do is stay strong, and fight. After all, you are crazy. I love this line the most. Yes everyone is crazy, in their own way In full ...
Apr 17, 2010
