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I'd recommend the Saga of Darren Shan (Cirque du freak), and the Demonata series, both by Darren Shan. There's also most of the stuff by Matthew Reilly. Oh! THe Saga ...

This was very good, Zakku. Interesting concept. However, I feel that you're telling too much. Describe a bit, use metaphors and similes. The way this is going, it's kind of ...

This was an epic poem, God. Seriously. I actually deciphered the theme here, which I am very proud of. It's a very nice message you have here. Personally, I'd be ...

Hi Llama duck! Here on YWS, we ask that you please review two pieces of work before posting your own. That being said, here's the nitpicky stuff. I can't really ...

I haven't read it yet... Gonna be reading it next year for the class novel study, but I wonder how much it would spite my teacher if I were to ...

I liked this a lot. It was very suspenseful, and I loved the tone you used for this. Love the ending. Just creates a depressing mood for this. And I ...

This is a bit strange. I had to look up some of the worlds since they're a bit obscure to me. Well, on with the critique. Your flow is a ...

Reviving this thread, just for a bit. I'll just quote what I said in another forums: Honestly, I have nothing against Meyer. She can make a good love plot, but ...

Sun Lord of the Outlander series. Just horrible. The prologue was fine, it actually had an interesting backstory. The first few pages were good, but I got totally lost after ...

Gahks, I can truly say that I love your poetry now. Your opening line was a hook that reeled me in. I was captivated by every word, each line flowed ...

This looks really good. I'll start with a few nitpicks here, if you don't mind. The forbidden fruit It'd be nice if you could add punctuation. This is a good ...

At times like this, I felt like giving up. The war, the crisis and the poverty must stop. This doesn't really rhyme with the line above. Remember, poetry doesn't necessarily ...

This is a very good poem. Truly, I wish I could write like this. Your rhyming was very well done, and the rhythm and pacing is good. It makes me ...

This was a very amazing poem. It brightened up my day so, so very much. I'm doing this in school, so I have to be very quiet about this. Ssh. ...

Hi! I'll get right down to the critique. Sorry about the nitpicking. all the carefree a smile could. Um, carefree is an adjective. Perhaps 'how carefree a smile could be' ...