Warlord

k thanks for this detailed and amzing review :)

so true buddy . i mean what you've written is totally true . it's clean of mistakes (and that's cool). keep up the good work i am eager to read ...

i am just sying that there could have been more talking between jackson and rafael you know something in the starting like how r u not just like i am ...

hey warlord is here for review. your concept for this poem was excelent.i cannot imagine any thing more better than this .this is the real humour . best of luck ...

thanks for reviewing

Well , all of your constructive reviews are welcome. once again thanks a lot.

Thanks i will consider your constructive suggestions

awesome ,i like your writing style ,simple yet it's elegant. you kept it small that's good . emotions are used in right amount too much of them makes even a ...

pretty good description but i think you must elaborate the part in which you tell about the not insert unnecessary emotions too much it makes the story dull.otherwise thumbs up ...

it's a really good story .I can gurantee u tat many of whom read tis will have a tingle in there hearts .but you need to be more expressive in ...

it was a bit errie at the middle of it .but in my opinion there should be a little more description just to make it a little clear but at ...