Warlock

I love this poem, I said I came to YWS improve and it's pieces like this that really help. I don't do much poetry anymore (Trying to catch up on ...

MY interpretation of the meaning is there, someone who's potential world is ruined by the carelessnes of someone else, and as for the guy who is intrigued by how the ...

I did like it, but I think when read the fact that it is one sentence made me open my mouth and go "Huh?" I had to read it a ...

Really great, just one thing you use And a bit much which i suppose is ok, but And is a word I always hated. EDIT: Snoink beat me to it ...

I'll comment after my suggestions :) I took a stroll along a lonely shore Seeking something I cannot define. In that moment of loneliness, In the midst of confusion, I ...

Alainna! This is wonderful, who knew. (Joke) This is actually damn good, it's like Junk just better :p I love it even though I hate non-fantasy stories :) I'm reading ...

I understand it, but the image in my mind wasn't so strong, perhaps some metaphors would improve it, unless the fact that there are no metaphors is meant to add ...

I love it, but I think you should change your final line to: South for the winter that NEVER ends. It rolls off the tongue a lot easier, but I'm ...