Vivian

Thanks and Dejavu. L

oh. Have you ever brought them flowers? It's nice that you visit them.

What is abysmal? Why Abyss? It's a lovely poem, a little deep. In a way showing your outlook on the worlds dimining beauty. Is that why you wrote this? I ...

I will. I already had the second chapter but aftet changing the first I need to change tat too. Plus everything was on my late T-T laptop. But I haven't ...

Who? Nice poem,don't think I'll have nightmares though. ;) What I want to know is, Who is your GHOST? Is that the poems deeper meaning? Is it guilt?

Who? Nice poem,don't think I'll have nightmares though. ;) What I want to know is, Who is your GHOST? Is that the poems deeper meaning? Is it guilt?

Why are they in a classroom? Is Mr. Thompson the who changed her,because we can tell that the rest of her family aren't vampires. Again, the story's good. Very interesting ...

Awesome. I'm looking forward to the rest.

She's a vampire right, she could just knock the guy out and bite. Or like some other stories, erase his memory. She doesn't have to kill em.

Thanks. I'll fix it.

From the first try, and the next chapter. I'm waiting for someone to notice who the girl actually is.

Thanks I've fixed the mistakes and yes I 'll add Cage in more. He shows up a bit more in the second chapter but the rest I'm not sure of ...

Thanks. I really need to proof read and edit before I publish. I'm glad I did better, even though I had almost no problems with the first version. Did you ...

Sorry about that, it;s just that I haven't named the king yet. If you have any suggestions I'm all ears. And the little girl is not his daughter, she's just ...

Hey Hyena nice poem it sounds like- a ballad I think. It has the flow of nursery rhymes which aren't really meant for children and tells a subtle story. The ...