VimesyPumpkin

I really like this, love the contrast of the children's innocent actions with the foreboding, dark setting. I thought it gave a lovely glimmer of hope in such a dismal ...

Thank you so much - what an amazing response! And your notes for improvement are very valuable, especially what you said about metre. It's definitely something I want to work ...

I really enjoyed this, well done! The only thing I can say for improvement is in the first stanza you might like to put 'when' and 'whom' in inverted commas ...

Thanks so much, I really appreciate the feedback! xx

I love it, don't change a word.

I like this! You get the content across very well. I'd agree with dawnpath1 that if you changed some the places that you brake the lines it would make it ...

I love this, I'm sorry I can't be constructive but it's just so good! You could maybe add a setting sentence at the beginning, but anything else would ruin it. ...

I really like it =) It's pleasant and lovely, gives of that sort of feeling :) I especially like the fifth line. Well done !