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To be absolutely honest, I hated the style. It was seriously overly distracting and I have no idea what the poem even said because I was concerned with the style ...

Mm, i critiqued this before things went was pretty. But now it's gone, so you get the short less-cheery version: Don't use "you" in terms of the reader. She did ...

I have a few things to say: 1. These are not technically haikus. 2. As Clau said, please do not post work you aren't serious about. 3. I hate haikus ...

Though I actually like this a bit, I have a few criticisms as well. First, the last line at the end of the first stanza... Quote: to Shadow I think ...

To make my point, I want to tell you a story: I saw the moon, reflected in a puddle. A smooth, unbroken puddle, and the moonlight made a silver shining ...

To be absolutely honest with you, this wasn't one of my favorites from your collection. I feel like it wasn't as defined (my favorite word of the week) as many ...

I do have to agree with Mad. You do have some really spectacular imagery going on, but it's very scattered. But the main thing I a problem with is that ...

It was cute, it was light, cheerful. But, something is missing. I've been thinking about this for a few minutes and I have no idea what is missing. It just ...

Goldie- Hehe Crysi is right...it's a great rhythm and it's 'cute', although I frown on the use of cute is describing literature--it works here though. However, I think I might ...

I think just because it snowed doesn't prove anything wrong. Along with Global Warming comes drastic weather changes, not just heat waves. Al Gore's video does portray a 'worst case ...

This isn't really poetry. If you put it in stanzas rather than in a paragraph it would be considerable, but even then it's a little iffy. It's very scatterbrained and ...

Yea, I have to agree...I'm not entirely sure I'd call this is poem. Foul language is actually acceptable in poetry, even on this forum. It needs to be given a ...

The YWS is not a place to post your "thrown together in 5 seconds and has no meaning at all--I just like it because it rhymes" poems. Here we give ...

The YWS is not a place to post your "thrown together in 5 seconds and has no meaning at all--I just like it because it rhymes" poems. Here we give ...

This is nice. But, I would like to see more of a 'broken thoughts' kind of thing rather than complete thoughts. I mean, if you think about it--if you took ...