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  • Poetry » General, General Re: understand me when I open myself to you

    I really liked this. I love the word choice and the imagery I see in my head. "...reach beyond our bodies like phantom limbs that stretch and grow into beautiful ...

    Nov 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: You only love me in my dreams

    I can see this is an old post, but I really loved this. It has amazing imagery. I love the way it flows so effortlessly. Dreams are our fantasies, what ...

    Oct 30, 2012
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Dramatic Re: It's Been Far Too Long

    I really liked this. It's something I can really relate to. I really enjoyed the chorus. I really like the line, "I am less and less alive." It really shows ...

    Oct 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Slenderman

    Wow. I definitely really liked this. The poem flowed very nicely. I love the rhyme scheme very much. The poem has a very eerie feeling, of death and longing. Longing ...

    Oct 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Horror Re: Nightmares

    I really like the way you broke up each stanza. I myself, tend to write my poems in such a free stanza. It really works for this poem. I really ...

    Oct 30, 2012
  • Lyrics » Realistic, General Re: Skinny Cage

    I agree with aVeryThoughtfulBeing. It really is beautiful. I can relate to it in both perspectives, the one watching this person destroying themselves, and the one who is destroying themselves. ...

    Oct 29, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hidden in the Closet

    Well, I definitely understand what this poem is saying. It's something I can relate to. I think you broke the sentences awkwardly though, the way you started on some lines. ...

    Oct 29, 2012
  • Short Story » Narrative, General Re: Betrayal

    Overall, It was a good narrative. Some spelling errors, and accidental repeats of words. It has good emotion, something I can definitely relate to. I think it flows nicely, but ...

    Oct 29, 2012
  • Other » General, Realistic Re: To My Future Daughter

    I really think this is beautiful. It's a bittersweet feeling, both happy and sad. I agree that you do write with self-awareness and lots of emotions. It's both touching and ...

    Oct 23, 2012


He began to wonder why he had felt uneasy at all. It was like a man wondering in broad daylight why a dream had appeared so terrible to him at night.
— Chinua Achebe, Things Fall Apart