Nightmares

I really like the way you broke up each stanza. I myself, tend to write my poems in such a free stanza. It really works for this poem. I really felt the emotions in this poem, definitely something I can relate to as well. I agree with Fleeting, that this poem gives a sense of concept, but you break it down into such a way that really gets a reader. I would also have to agree that my favorite line was also, "I feel the fakeness of their face". That really got me. I can definitely relate to that specific line than anything else.
Overall this is a really great, emotional, overpowering poem.

The way you have broken up the text is interesting. It makes the poem more detailed, more unique, even though you didn't seem to have a specific pattern with the stanzas. I also feel that this poem is very relatable. It gives you the sense of a concept, or of a picture, but doesn't just throw it in your face bluntly. I like that- probably because I usually just outright state concepts in my poem.
One thing I would call to your attention, though I don't know if it was a mistake or not, is in the second-to-last stanza:
"And causes helpless
Spiritual drop,
And cats my
Freedom wings straight off."
Was 'cats' supposed to be 'cuts'?
Anyway, the poem is overall, very beautiful. I think the best part for me was that this work was relatable to me; especially the part "I feel the fakeness of their face". I could understand exactly what you were trying to convey.
I can't wait to read more of your work.

This is awesome! It was very dark and it fit the nightmare theme very well,it occasionally trailed off from the dream topic but that's okay I guess because it doesn't go to far off topic.

Dawnpath, I totally agree with you, the way you have broken up the text makes it read in a far more interesting way than it would do otherwise. I review little poetry, but I know when a piece really hits the mark. This does that, and well.
When I read the first few lines, I was worried that this was going to be yet another poem full of lines which had been forced to rhyme. In actuality it was a refreshing way to start what turned out to be a far more engaging piece of writing. The fact that the lines are not of equal length, and each verse being slightly different in length and tempo makes for far more interesting reading than a lot of the poems I have seen published.
Sadly, I cannot complain about spelling or punctuation. The only thing I can mention is that, in some instances, you have started a new line with a capital letter after using a comma (e.g:A mask, A scream, A gasp,) while at others you have not (e.g: The gasp, a fleeting from my lips,). If this is merely an inconsistency then I suggest you choose one format and try your best to stick to it. If it holds some poetic symbolism, then you are a better poet than I!
Overall I think the piece speaks quite a turbulent tale, one which certainly evokes an emotional response from me. The fact that you decided to write another poem in this style below just furthers the point that this is a great way to write, and certainly that this was no fluke, you do have a flare for poetry. Keep writing.

This is a common thing that people like to say;
You're lines are broken, it's easy to fix, when ever you stumble, change the line.

My response for now is;
Thanks for the advice, but have you considered I like it like that?
I like it broken,
For broken means
That my point holds
About this dream

This endless plot that
Twists and turns
And leaves other corridors
to burn.

I promise it's
not to rhyme
because I don't try
to rhyme.

My poems aren't
technical,
On philisophical
Readings and measurements
Of me.

A snap shot
Of a moment.
A picture of the past

A broken mile
Or helpful smile.

So if you wonder
Why it's broken
the certain way it is,

Think about
my effect
and
emphasis
there in.