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Hi. This is cute and simple. However, I think that you need to work more on the beginning. I'm saying this because once upon a time I loved her. The ...

Hi bubbly. Remember who you are, your not who they say. The "your" should be "you're". You can be as you please, put the worries away. I think the comma ...

Hi. You're a good poet. I'm here to review, though. I'll quote your whole stanzas because I've thought of replacing some words to help your poem flow better and I ...

Hi Nargles. I like your idea. I'll give you two suggestions though. But all that comes is the shade That wilts your heart. Something is missing there. I think "Wilts ...

Hi, IntelligentlyStupid. Lovely imagery. I like that you use punctuation, and that you are organized when it comes to creating stanzas. I have a question, though... Why the random capital ...

Hi Silverlock. Descriptions are wonderful! But too much of that and little action can get boring. When I was done reading, I concluded that you barely said anything at all. ...