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A few spelling errors, but it's good! What is your first language, then?

Good! Sorry to repeat what others have said, but the Winston Churchill thing leapt out. As it was for Fool's Duel, you didn't need to say that. That aside, it ...

Yeah, I read that on his website as well. I could go through step-by-step and say what's similar to LOTR and Star Wars. The plot is "A New Hope" with ...

I've read the next bit! This was a good carrying on of the action, and I want this to continue! The only thing that was glaringly obvious was the arrow ...

I'm really enjoying this! Sorry, I know we're supposed to crit and be constructive, but I'm pushed for time now, and the whole thing was great anyway! -ST

You need to get this moved to poetry. Mods? Mods? Little moving needed here! -ST

Rewrite coming up...

Oh. I have a strong stomach, but a very weak heart. Nope, actually that's the other way round. I like blood and guts in their proper place, which is safely ...

Ignore this thing's horrendousity, it'll be getting a rewrite some time soon. 8)

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Thank you for reviewing, Crysi!

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