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Very pretty, even though I don't like Eragon. You could break this up better...I think...some of the lines are a bit too short while others are too long...don't ask me ...

I like this a lot! :) Your style is very good, and your descriptions of characters conjure up a good picture of waht they might look like. I like the ...

I liked this, especially the bit about the ice. Its the sort of thing I can imagine myself doing... :lol: Yes, a few spellings mistakes that Ofour mentioned. I don't ...

Forgive me for sounding stupid, but what is the green candle that is still burning? Have I missed the point? (I'm not that great at extracting meanings from things that ...

Yes, cliched boy-and-dragon story, but your style looks like you're good enough to get away with it! :D Proof-read this, make sure you put capital letters in their proper place ...

Pushing the leaves away, she immediately twisted from the scene, and lost her lunch. The bile was still green in her mouth when she turned back. There, bloody and severed, ...

I thought that this was good, and I liked the dot-dot-dot (...) Its adds to the effect. :) Looking forward to reading more of this. Now, where have I heard ...

Ha! Very funny! :lol: :lol: "We're hungry!" They bellow, "It's time for a meal!" I hug my stuffed teddy. "Don't eat me!" I squeal. ...and... :D "What is it?" They ...

Oooh its big! Can you break it up into paragraphs so's its easier to read? (Yeah, I know that's rich coming from me, the one who NEVER makes paragraphs, but ...

Weeeeel.........I don't like that about Ramwick and Karz. Its slash, and I positively hate slash. The story itself is well written, and I want to find out about the It ...

Hmm, not bad! Makes me want to read Chapter Two (which I'm going to do :D) A woman in silver and red garments, elderly, This would read better as "An ...

[ “I’ll take that as a no. Do not try to console me on matters with which you are unfamiliar THAT was very Norrington-ish :lol: As to slash, it didn't ...

Hey, don't be too harsh you guys. Its very discouraging, reading blighting reviews. Maybe, Alanna if you rewrote the the poem in a different, more clearer way, but still retaining ...

Bit start with what exactly IS an autistic person?Is Mr Time a watch or something?Have to confess...I was muddled by the end of it. :oops: :?

Pretty odd subject...what was his actual condition and why was everyone avoiding him?Something contagious?I wish you'd explained that a bit more,but the last sentance sums it up : "He began ...