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*blinks* Man, her parents aren't very nice, but then, she isn't being very reasonable about the move either. Just a move, right? Still, good writing, and ta for PMing me. ...

Nazi-Grammer Dude Here. :razz: Afterwards he strapped Melden to his waist and looked at his mirror reflection. He focused on his faint shadow and poured his magical energy into it. ...

Tha's had a dubble nit pick, so I'll just say as how this was good, but could be made even better by an edit. Just incorparate all of Sword's and ...

Very good! Very well written, and...tense!! One thing: Tamia bought a bowl, and moved over to the cleanest table she could find. It was tastless, but it was hot and ...

Like it once more! Sorry I can't crit it more thoroughly, but there's nothing to point out! :D That makes it a compliment if you look at it sideways. :wink: ...

Hm, not bad. :) You need to review AT LEAST twice before you post any stuff of your own, though!! On the story... if Emily's never shown any talent for ...

Christian doesn't equal priest. Catholic, perhaps? Anyway, "Kain" is spelt "Cain". It would be nice for a story to portray a religious person as just a person - not a ...

Intrestin :) One thing: Da-ja-vu hit me as I shuffled through his front door I think it's spelt "déjà vu" but I'm not sure. Anyways, this is good. Nicely writ. ...

It was perfectly alright the first time. :? All you needed to do was to edit your first prologue. See the "Edit" button at the top of the post? Just ...

Haven't I read this one already? :? Anyway, you've missed out a few dees. Peter stare into space, not willing to believe what he had just heard. Stare = stared ...

Those girls are *nasty*. :twisted: Is this set during the Salem Witch trials, or around that same time in history? If so, I think you should change the "Daddy" to ...

Oh, is this true? What actually happened? I was so angry that I stopped going to gymnastics practices and in my weak time... Weak = week? Anyhow, looks to be ...

I thought it was good. If this is just a flash-fic, then it doesn't need anymore. But I think you could add a bit more description about what it was ...

Very, very good!! :D There was hardly any mistakes at all. Sometimes our eyes changed color but kept equally metallic , our tattoos did along with them. Semi colon here? ...

*coughcough* I'm another of those idiots who has no business in the poetry section. I found this well written, but confusing. Too ambiguous, but your style's good. Try something less ...