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This isn't really a poem. The little I know on the subject of poetry suggests that poems need to be spaced out, full of metaphor, stuffed with double meanings and ...

You need to post the thing up here, not give us a document. Check out the other work on the site, sa? As Aedomir said, you need to do at ...

Basically, this was rather weak. It's flat. What is there to this that makes it special? What's to distinguish it from the ten million other stories and poems about vampires ...

“You going to miss it?” asked Jataal, who rode just ahead of him , Dapper’s hooves clattering on the well-paved road. I'd say change this to a new sentence. It ...

Very funny! :lol: Louis glared down at the ink caterpillar that he'd sketched on his notes; the caterpillar stared back. I'd nix the semi colon and make it all one ...

Whizz-whizz, sir! Wings be back! :D Apart from the delay in updates *glares meaningfully at Mademoiselle* this was very good, and I'm glad you added the little note up the ...

Short. But sweet. ^_^ The lieutenant roared in rage and slashed out, the tip of his blade cutting across the Nagai’s face and biting deep into his flesh. Danteel cried ...

Hearbreaks. Heartbreaks. I want to hang myself. I want to shoot myself. I have nothing to live for anymore. A little too dramatic. If this is what you're feeling right ...

I like the freak. :) This was very good and very intriguing. It kept me reading right to the end, and I want to find out what happens next. Will ...

Lol, that was so funny! :lol: Random Guy 2 and Man With No Name were the best, especially Random Guy 2, never dead. :lol: :lol: And, did I mention, :lol: ...

This isn't like the Call of the Wild I read. :? Is this a different one? Anyway, you need to PM a mod to move this to someplace else, like ...

Very good! It was very nicely written and interesting as well. But... I'm confuzzled. If I have this right (stop me if I'm not), the girl is playing with a ...

She sat up and peeled it away, the pleats leaving little angry red lines in the skin newly exposed . I'd change it to "newly exposed skin" so it reads ...

Lol! :lol: 8) Very funny, even though soup ain't my favorite. My only quibble is this, and not with the ryhme: Or just inhale it, like a fish. Inhale? Ew, ...

Very good essay. :) There's so many books where a pastor or minister's life is really dull and dreary, so it's real great to see a response to that. Or ...