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Hi Cspr! First off, double-spacing. Leave a line between each paragraph and every time someone new speaks. It breaks it up and makes it look more inviting. Big blocks of ...

Yo Shear! He flew through the chilly clouds with his hands at his side. Although it was raining, the weather was a perfect cover for him to fly at dusk ...

Hi Skinsum! So, ze famous Stop and Stare. We haff heard much about you, mein kuchen. I just couldn’t spend another five minutes in my house. I’d only been wandering ...

Hello! Well, this is short. ^_^ You have an awful lot of drama happening, and I'm not sure if it's bordering on the melodramatic. You have to be careful when ...

Hey Jas! I’m so sorry it took me so long to get to this, and I’m sorry again because this was a beautiful read. A few nitpicks: you were there ...

Hi Joshua! It's nice to read something of yours again. ^_^ At first I wasn't sure about this. It moves quite slowly, and the tone is quiet, almost methodical, but ...

Hello reason! I'm not too sure what I think of this. There's a lot of raw emotion, which is excellent, but for such a strong emotional piece, I feel like ...

Hi Ikiru! This is good; I like the reason behind the red ribbon, it was very dark and morbid. I thought it would be something tame, but it turned out ...

Hi again! I’m still not sure I find Raleigh believable. I mean, the bartender probably sees every trick in the book, so why does he fall for a simple seduction? ...

Hello winter! I have to say, I'm very intrigued. ^_^ This took a while to get going, and I didn't much like the "Her" part, mainly because I didn't like ...

Hi psudiname! I heard the plastic groan as my hand squeezed the phone even tighter. "But things were going so well! We were going to see The Dave Mathew's Band ...

Hi Rachael! I like this, especially as a beginning, as it opens up a lot of questions, yet answers some of the most immediate ones. ^__^ Unlike Rosey, I liked ...

Hello dhanshucool! First off, spacing is key. Vital. This is all one huge block of text, and you need some paragraphs. Paragraphs are cool. Also friendly. Secondly, commas. It would ...

Hi creativityrules! At first I wasn't sure how this came under "Romantic", but the ending cleared that up and made this into a very sweet little sketch of emotion. The ...

Hey dragonrider! I???m the boogey man. I waited in the dark. You should start a new paragraph here. Before you’ve been talking in general terms, and now you’re in the ...