Today is February 14th. When we say this date, the first thing that comes to everyone's mind is Valentine's Day. But, I am exceptional. The first thing and the worst thing that comes to my mind is my ex-girlfriend's wedding anniversary. It has been one year, since she got married. In other words, we can say, it has been one year, since she left me.
I never wanted this day to come in my life. If I had got some power, I would delete this day alone from my life. Life has become horrible after she left me. Yes, I miss her so much.
Still I remember the day she gave me her marriage invitation. I waited for someone to wake me up and tell everything was just a dream. But it never happened. It was very hard for me to realize that she was leaving me.
I wanted to see her badly, but she is beyond seas. I had only one way to see her. It was through facebook. When I got to know that she was going to get married, I blocked her, so that no longer I will be in contact with her. I logged into my profile and unblocked her, but unfortunately her profile had closed privacy settings. So I couldn???t see anything about her. Immediately I opened her husband's profile. There I could able to see some photos.
I had gone through the photos one by one. In all the photos she seemed very happy. In one photo, she was hugging her husband from backside of a bike. At that moment I lost my patience. I closed my laptop immediately and wondered how girls can forget things so soon easily.
'Though she is not the only girl in this whole world, why am I still back of her,' I thought.
After seeing such things, I started thinking whether she really loved me. I just wanted to slap her and tell that I love her more than anything in this world.
She is the one who made me smile and cry as well. Though many people are there around me, I felt lonely. Even my mobile must be feeling lonely, since there are no incoming and outgoing text messages and call except from Airtel.
I wanted to take a big rod in hand and start breaking things around me to show my frustration.
Everyone has a breakpoint.
Her parent is the breakpoint for her.
But, she is the breakpoint for me.
Hope All is well (Except me).
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Hello dhanshucool!
First off, spacing is key. Vital. This is all one huge block of text, and you need some paragraphs. Paragraphs are cool. Also friendly.
Secondly, commas. It would probably annoy you if I went through and corrected all your commas, but here’s the first paragraph (well, what should/could be the first paragraph):
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Thirdly, emotion. This is all about emotion, and yet it doesn’t come through as strong as it should. You’re telling everything; you say “this happened”, “this happened”, “this happened”, but you never really engage. You could make this much stronger by changing this to the present tense, giving us a sense of real immediacy and urgency. Describe what’s happening in detail, thoughts and feelings.
Keep writing!
-twit