TwinSeed

Welll, these new stanzas.. they seem a bit forced. They aren't written quite as well. I still like them though, and you have the same general theme. I'm not really ...

Woww. Quite a review. I understand what you mean though, even if you did just saythe same thing over and over in 100 words xD

Well I didn't actually read about it, I just googled pictures of it XD I'll review your works anytime if you ask. Don't worry, I'll keep it a secret o-o'

I've never been good at talking in present tense, but I've been trying to work on that. However, to me, even the last couple of lines seemed to be in ...

Thank you both, I was going for the affect of realism and emotions specifically, and it looks like I hit that right on the head. @josh: Yes, I used few ...

Well this is a short story, not a poem, but thanks anyway. Hehe. Your kind words are much appreciated.

Thanks Kattie! As you can see, I worked to keep the same rhythm here.

Thank you very much! It's always encouraging to hear praise. If you liked this as much as you claim, then I suggest looking at my other works. EDIT: StoryWeaver: Thank ...

Thank you Desire & Ceely, your reviews were nice and helpful to my self esteem.

Thank you, that's encouraging :)

Thank you everyone for your help in making this better, but I doubt I'll edit this one or the original on paper (cause I'll probably shred it soon and never ...

I appreciate your kind words, and I promise that many other great poems will follow.

Okay, COMPLETELY disregard the first two notes if you wish, they're only tid bits of info. As for the third note, that was a poor analogy. With the last sentence ...

Thank you very much. The first stanza probably does seem confusing to a lot of people, so I'll edit the first post to explain. EDIT: DrunkOnWriting: I hadn't even realized ...

Thank you people! I wasn't sure how well this was, but now that I have some support, I have more confidence