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:D As the Black Rose said it's "cute". I’d be lost with out you I think this should be "without". It is a nice final line. Very abrupt. It lacks ...

:) Its a nice story but it's very hard to read as it's quite squashed. Define the paragraphs better and it would be easier to understand. A couple of sentences ...

:P I liked it! I liked how it used traditional love symbols - diamonds; eyes etc but twisted them so it was original and not chiched. Nice :wink: Green eyed ...

:cry: Ohhhhh.... Its so sad. I liked the image of youth being crushed under the "weight of life". turned to stone; and like Medusa's statues, all are blind. I love ...

Erm... There was something about this poem that just didn't feel right. :? The boys are hurrying to and fro, Outside the walls of College Chapel. The last line in ...

Hey! This is quite nice! :wink: It shows what can be done in the minimum of words. I liked the subtle imagery too. It flows effortlessly! :P Nothing much is ...

Hey you're new!! :thumb: Hiiiiiii! *waves enthuastically* What got me was the fact that the first and third stanzas do not rhyme while the middle stanza does. :-s Maybe its ...

I liked it! :wink: "What a disgusting rat!" the girl exclaimed. The insult made me both comfused and melancholy. I thought they would admire my pearly white fur, but instead ...

There are quite a few typos in this piece. I thought you loved mne dearly as much as i loved you. But now it seems where over I feel it ...

No-one. I think ( not sure ) this should be "no one". But you won't resist, oh no, not when he kisses you holds you...remember, hand to hand, lip to ...

:shock: This poem really moves the reader (me)! Your fragile pencil etches verse in empty notebooks The pencil, like the narrators voice in the world, is fragile. A sense of ...

This is quite a nice poem. I loved the hint of bitterness in : Look at my skirt If it were short Would you see me As the poem progresses ...

:-k I think the second stanza is quite long and with the use of run on lines it becomes hard to follow. Maybe by splitting it up and adding a ...

:) This is lovely!! I love the idea of the revisiting of old memories being expressed as a window ( :shock: I think thats what you're trying to say) and ...

This poem is really nice. :D It aptly captures the innocence of a child to the horrors of the world around us. A poignant, moving poem. :cry: :wink: