Trikky

This seems like it would be a great poem for a mug or something. I'll give her a vote of confidence: my sister has pulled out my hair before. She ...

Notes: Limbo’s

I think it would be good with a little more structure or rhyme... I'm not sure what kind, but I'm no good at poetry. Also, if you could be more ...

Bad news first: I love the conversational tone of this piece, but there were a lot of things that struck me as odd. Like how Saba is worried about being ...

Awww! That's so sad! I think a few of the commas were unnecessary, though, like you get caught at the end of each line instead of flowing where maybe it ...

Ewww. I never liked it much, maybe just because we read it in school, but I could never believe anything his characters did. They just seemed like they were out ...

Wow, what a personal piece... I'd feel a bit bad critiquing it! However, I really don't understand what the problem was with the girl. Was ADHD the learning disability? Or ...

It's a not a bad poem, especially not for a first try. Yes-- you get the old English wrong-- thou should be thine, in the way you're using it here, ...

There were quite a few mistakes, and I like to have my own little blood sport picking them out if you don't mind >:D marble complex --> marble complexion made ...

Chill poem. How does the rest of this line go? a bait . It looks like it was cut off in the middle. There were a few grammar mistakes, but ...

Ah! I just read it in December and it was AMAZING! I found the aliens not quite as philosophical as Slaughterhouse 5's Trafalmadorians, but they were still pretty cool, with ...

I can’t seem to act like a normal girl. I don’t particularly care for dolls or dress-up. So, the other girls said I was cursed. Huh. Sounds like she's just ...

It will be my future reference if I ever decide to post again. Haha, no pressure, right? xD Ah well. I'll try my best and hopefully you won't be too ...

Hehe, don't be so hard on yourself. And I quote Yoda "Do, or do not. There is no try." You wrote a poem; that's cool in itself. :3 That said, ...

Wow. I was surprised too... I expected it to be really angsty and too quickly made, but this was pretty awesome! I'm not much of a poet, so I'll just ...