ToritheMonster

Hi! Great poem. My only problem is that you say "peddles" I assume you mean "petals", like those on a flower, not pedal like others have suggested. :mrgreen: Overall, great ...

Hi! This was really good-- it kept me entertained. It looks like everyone else has pointed out what I found wrong. My only suggestions are that you give some more ...

Hi! To answer your questions: 1) No, I didn't find this preachy, it was actually quite engrossing. 2) It is mostly coherent, I will touch on that when I review. ...

hmm... your imagery was very good, and your spelling and grammar was spot on. However, the point of this poem evades me. What is it supposed to be about. Also, ...

I have to agree with Snoink... and you really should take criticism a little more easily. my school is having that contest too, and I can give you advice from ...

Hi! This was quite touching. However, it needs a lot of editing. You are an advanced writer, and you could catch most of them yourself if you just skim through. ...

Wow! This was really good. My edits are in bold-- some of them are suggested ways of rewording. It was raining at the airport. Fat grey droplets pour ed down ...

Awww.... I really liked this. here's a suggestion: instead of: In a world so cruel, In a world so cold, One girl sits, And cries alone. how about: In a ...

between my twin and me.” this should be "and I." “I have always thought that my name was referring to the color of my heart, not the shading of my ...

Dear God: Wow! This was really good! It looks like everyone else has caught the errors, so I can just shower you with praise! *throws flowers* I loved your wording! ...

Alright, first w/ the editing. I did my corrections on bold. My memory is stained with your memories, y our blood, y our t ears of all your past. I ...

Wow! This was utterly entrancing. it was dark, spooky, sad, and suspenseful, all at once. :D Your grammar and spelling is perfect too, as far as I can see. The ...

aright! this is pretty good, but like the review above me says, it gets hard to understand and seemingly pointless. You also use big words-- its nice to have a ...

This is very good1 I don't see why your friend dissuaded you-- they were probably jealous. Sure, your plot isn't exactly original, but it's entertaining and you spin it well. ...

Well, this is quite good. Review time!!!!!!!! I was not too bad looking; this is very modern-sounding for the time. friends and start having a conversation. you don't need anything ...