My memory is stained with your memories,
Your blood,
Your Tears of all your past.
I may didn't exist then,
But now you became a part of me.
Because when I first met you.
I knew ... that feeling at first sight.
It was meant to be.
Forever and Beyond.
That's what people say.
How long is forever in this present day?
One couple who said, "It's gonna last .. till the day I die."
At the very minute, a marriage, a couple, a relate-ship, a love
Ends.
How long is forever?
Honestly tell me.
Yes I can wait for you, but not "forever".
It feels like I know you,
quiet for a long time.
Sure we haven't met?
It's will explain everything.
But whatever, forget it.
I rather meet you now, rather than never.
I have a life.
I have a heart.
I have this poem,
written for you.
I don't know if it makes sense.
I just hope it do.
I have feelings.
I am a person.
I have a life.
I love you, can't say it to your face.
Yet, some day I will.
Good things come to those who wait.
But that wait isn't forever.
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Alright, first w/ the editing. I did my corrections on bold.
ok, ok, this needs a lot of editing. Some parts you rhyme, some you don't. keep that consistent. your grammar is weird, and it's overall confusing. Who are you talking to? Are they dead, because you mention blood. And if you have memories of them, how can you have not met them? This needs a lot of editing, then it will shape up.
This is truly a wonderful creation of your passionate display of wit in poetry. Keep writing more and you can truly inspire more. your style is free verse. Well, can you write one with good rhyme and rhythm..