ToritheMonster

Hey Belle, welcome to YWS! Ah, I love short posts. They give room for detailed reviews. Here goes, my corrections/comments in reddish pink: Have you ever wondered if life was ...

Hi! Dreamy here!I'll be your reviewer today. On to your poem! I thought it was nice. My main problem: your punctuation. In some spots you had it, some you didn't ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! As Layla said, this is a tad too long. I'd split it into three parts. That way you can get really detailed reviews on each one. ...

That was...really scary. Good, though. So, how does she remember killing him? You don't have any memories until you are three. And how did she have a knife, if she ...

Aw! This was so sweet. I was bracing myself for another cliche break-up ending, but you gave me a happy one! That was great. I love happy endings. I don't ...

I totally agree with Prokayote. After I read her (his? sorry, i can't tell, there's no gender specified in the avatar) review, I though: "Wait. This main character was a ...

All right, as the biggest Killers fan on earth, I appreciated your little song "snippets" or whispers.Just make sure you credit them, as you kinda have. I liked this, it ...

I sort of agree with kimithy. There are lots of poems like this out there.That said,I enjoyed this one. It's fine if you "copied" those first lines, I mean, it's ...

Hey, I agree with Bondgirl. But, you did say you were gonna un-cliche things, so maybe... I dunno. Either way, You might want to at least touch up on your ...

This was absolutely amazing! Your characters were perfectly rounded, and I felt like I really knew Vera and Evi by the end. They seemed so real! Your descriptions were nice ...

Hey, I'm Dreamy, and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, welcome to YWS! This was a nice poem. Your main problem was punctuation.just look it over, and you'll ...

Hey! Alright, I'm not big on romance, but this was cute. My favorite part was your description of the beach and sunset in the beginning. It was very real, to ...

Hey, Dreamy here, and welcome to YWS! As you can probably see from all those other lengthy reviews, this needs a lot of work. I don't mean to be harsh, ...

This was really cool! I didn't know you could get so much out of an empty jar, but you definitely showed how to. I also liked how you changed your ...

Hi! I really liked this poem.I, personally, didn't mind the fact that you repeated the phrase "the dishwasher's bane" because I think it added flow. That's just my personal opinion, ...