Tikaya

I GET IT NOW. She can't eat ice cream because she's a ghost!!!! Ahhh that makes so much sense!!! Also you do not need to change anything because ofc Raisa ...

Will read it tmr 💜🖤

Well you do have the farm stuff and idr farm stuff happening in the first episode of TWD xd (Also England is a new location so...! =D)

I'm really glad you found my running commentary helpful :3 Thanks for the explanations and happy editing!

Maybe you could make this more obvious in narration?

Oh it was very short so I don't have a good grasp on your style yet. It was definitely interesting to read tho! Thanks for the explanations yet I feel ...

but you said all interpretations are fine qq

Thanks for the reply! I am always so unsure with poems so I'm really happy that you liked my thoughts

Hmmm well maybe you could write that?

All this setup, for this. Look Alex, it's the Tommy and JP moment you have been waiting for. I hope it was worth it... Also I tried reducing the size ...

Can you even imagine that this and the next chapter used to be merged? Maybe that's is why this one feels more like setup? =D Also constructs mentioned! LMS VII ...

Ah so it is to help you?

Ohh thanks for these thoughts! That's exactly what I wanted to hear :3

Hmm if you don't like describing (and if you noticed, I also barely do descriptions hehe), you can generalise A LOT. Like, not every single character needs a good description. ...

It sounds to me like maybe this book could have used a few more chapters to make everything happen properly :) I understand that it has always been Shadow who ...