Tikaya

All this setup, for this. Look Alex, it's the Tommy and JP moment you have been waiting for. I hope it was worth it... Also I tried reducing the size ...

Can you even imagine that this and the next chapter used to be merged? Maybe that's is why this one feels more like setup? =D Also constructs mentioned! LMS VII ...

Ah so it is to help you?

Ohh thanks for these thoughts! That's exactly what I wanted to hear :3

Hmm if you don't like describing (and if you noticed, I also barely do descriptions hehe), you can generalise A LOT. Like, not every single character needs a good description. ...

It sounds to me like maybe this book could have used a few more chapters to make everything happen properly :) I understand that it has always been Shadow who ...

idk the rules qq I know how to play Rummy tho, it is my favourite card game after all (that can be played with a number of ppl other than ...

"BuT tIkAa, Rummy is not a Japanese card game. In fact, Japanese children don't play cards!" Well have you considered the fact that I don't know any Japanese games that ...

...should I have? XD

I'd never skip :) Thanks for the thoughtful response and the clarifications. It's just what I needed!

Ah it's fine, you can still fix the order by hand :) You using scrivener? idk what 8th graders are up to nowadays. When I was 8th grade I played ...

It... didn't happen to you? *checks A/N again* Ahhh I'm sorry, I was jumping to conclusions from the "this is a true experience", my apologies! (Reading comprehension is dead after ...

Ah well-written fight scene goes a long way :3 Good luck with the edits!

Ok I don't accept that explanation about "Surge noticing that her mind is read". It doesn't work in conjunction with Shadow being constantly in pain from having the minds of ...

Hmm the italics thing: it's more like the entire paragraph is italics and not just the dialogue. It happened in other chapters too. So basically the speech tag is also ...