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Re: 🩷🎪💄 The spiraling polka-dotted path of a clown: Chapters 9-10 💄🎪🩷
Good afternoon Creeper! Decided to jump in with Rosemary while high on coffee. Let’s do this! They were her friends and Valentina Love the exclusions XD Very “my friends and ...
Aug 15 -
Re: Adelaide’s abnormalities
Good morning Creeper! Felt like reading more about Samatha so here I am :3 Alright and right of the bat I feel like you don’t really have to repeat “sister” ...
Aug 15 -
Re: Man, Machine, and Madness [Ch. XXIII, Nine]
A/N: The chapter would be way cooler to read if you play the music mentioned in the chapter while reading it: hmmm That said, a stellar opening sentence! But that ...
Aug 14 -
Re: Awake?
Ahh more Perdita, let’s go! Hmmm a long, gray bar, with strange scribblings on it, nothing like the art Perdita remembered. I don’t rly know it comes across what she’s ...
Aug 13 -
Re: The Voices.
Hi hello and welcome! I’m here as a member of the Afterwatch to check out your Short Story :3 I like the idea of the correct breathing technique (maybe in ...
Aug 13 -
Re: Chapter Two and Three
Onto Chapter 2 …why doesn’t this one have a name attached? Or does that mean we are still in Raven’s POV? Also also why didn’t you publish ch1, 2 and ...
Aug 13 -
Re: MERCY: Playlist, Prologue, Chapter One
Morning Catz ^^ Have come to read your new story! Alrighty! So, your very first sentence has a bit too many adjectives and adverbs so I suggest cutting some and ...
Aug 13 -
Re: somewhere religion goes to die
Good morning Vic! I’m here for the Afterwatch, ofc, but also because I like essays—at least this sounds like an essay even if you sorted it under Short Story? Let’s ...
Aug 13 -
Re: Chapter 1- The People We Become
Ah I dont rly mind the centered and bold thing, but like rev alluded to: I do mind the everything-is-in-the-same-paragraph thing :) Hia I have come here as a member ...
Aug 12 -
Re: 3: Team handshake
Good morning! Am here for chapter 3 and for the Afterwatch ~ Hmmm wait, does Vesna work Saturdays? Or why is Anaka taking care of Sen on Saturday? (ok so ...
Aug 12 -
Re: Catch a killer
Hia and good morning! I came here in my duties as the Afterwatch to check out your short story! First of all I like the stream of consciousness you've got ...
Aug 12 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Sixteen: The Warehouse (REWRITE)
*side eyes this A/N* This one is more acceptable. I still don’t like it but it’s not actively harmful. Hey hey Greer, noodles are definitely real food. Oha he is ...
Aug 11 -
Re: Crawlers - Chapter Fifteen: The Hospital
Good morning Rev! Decided to come straight here before checking my notifs :3 Pro tip: NEVER write “the chapter sux I know” in the leading A/N. Even if you know ...
Aug 11 -
Re: Agents of Time: Chapter Eight; The plot fog
Why do I have this meme about “the plot thickens” “oh no, the plot clumpens!” in my head when I read “the plot fog” XD Like “the plot fogs, it ...
Aug 10 -
Re: By Decree of the Blessed Court
Did not forget about this last story on the list ^^ I’m so ready to get convinced the relationship between Aidan and “Daithi” is as strong as what Tatiana and ...
Aug 9
