Published August 13, 2026
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for mature content.
That noise, that squawking screeching angry voice in my head will not go away. This time I am not sure if it ever will. It has never stayed for this long. Never been so loud and harsh. All day I was just trying to breathe cause breathing will make them leave me alone, right? It was supposed to so why isn't it working? Why is my throat so dry, hands like swamps and head in zigzags. Why can't I just make it stop. It is screaming now, protesting an election inside my head pleading with me to let it in. To finally succumb to this blackness that will not stop treating me like another star to be sucked into the never-ending void. Why didn't they try to help me? They just ignored the parts of me they could not control. The part that confused them because I was not normal. Well fuck that I am giving into that void of darkness, and you know what I am about to have the best sleep of my life.
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Hii Nina I really love this it relates to many people and the fights in our mind often are like the one in real life.Your stoory is amazing and i hope that you keep writing stories like this that relate to the reader and you also highlighted that they do not end now tommorow or even in an hour but you showed us it takes time and focus to fight our battles in life. Keep on writing these series because they are really nice and remember a journey of a thousand miles only starts with one step keep on shining brighter and brighter everyday
Hai! Thank you so much! Yeah, I totally agree the battles in one's mind can be worse than any form of torture. But with hard work and the will to want to get better they go away, in my experience not fully but enough that you start feeling the bright parts of life again. I am thinking of continuing a series similar to this, about all the different types of struggles people have with their mental health. I hope I can count on you to read and review them!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hi Nina!
Your story is so great and I think so many people can relate to it on such a deep level.
The wars in our minds an often feel very much like the ones in real life, brutal and never ending. They can suck the life out of us, draining us to our wits end.
We must remember though, that they do end. Maybe not today, nor tomorrow, but they do.
If we fight and fight to keep the brightness within us alive, the darkness will eventually fade away and admit defeat.
Your ability to express your feelings and emotions through words is phenomenal and is not something a lot of people can do.
I hope you know how talented you are and try to keep your brightness shining!
Hi!
Thank you so much for the review.
Yeah, I feel like the voices in our head can be such a tricky subject to discuss which is why I write it down instead because it feels easier. But you are right it isn't all dark, happiness can appear just as quickly as it disappeared. Sometimes it also helps me to write down my demons so that I can think of them as just another story and it is time for the next page. Your completely right if we fight and truly want to feel better than the voices will vanish like they were never truly real!!
Hi hello and welcome!
I’m here as a member of the Afterwatch to check out your Short Story :3
I like the idea of the correct breathing technique (maybe in combination with meditation?) can quieten if not outright banish the voices!
Hm I’m not sure if the missing capitalization in some of your sentences is actually intentional? But that it isn’t consistent messes with my immersion XD
I like how ominous that last sentence sounds! Excellent way to end this piece!
That said, I feel like you have been too vague in the entire thing to really make me… get invested? Who are “they” that didn’t help? How long has this been going on? And why does this void want to take over?
At least one or two of those things should have been answered to really pull this narrative together ^^
Hi, thanks for the warm welcome.
This was kind of a bit of a scramble of an idea.
I totally agree with you about how I kept It quite vague, but that is also the mystery of it like "who didn't listen?" and "why they didn't listen?" that keeps you thinking and kind of making up your own scenario of who those voices are to you.
I was supposed to look back over the grammar in the morning as I wrote this half asleep. But thanks for the reminder because I completely forgot my punctuation.
Thanks for the feedback!