Threnody

Thanks! In cards, a fold is giving up on your hand. By saying forgiving reminisce I meant that your can't help thinking about the times you've had. Again, thanks. I'll ...

I'm praying for you! You're so brave to endure all this every day. I don't know how I could manage. You're doing a brilliant job though! Best wishes, Peace, Love, ...

Umm. I have a feeling that this was a prologue and that the baby was only an infant. That means it doesn't have a name. The guy carrying it to ...

Okay, so I reformatted it. Hope it's easier to read.

I can't tell what you're like from your writing! :smt005 Please tell.

It's noise. If I change it I'll need to change the whole rhyme scheme of that stanza. Hmmmmmm.

If it wasn't for the added "Roars and screams" then it wouldn't have been so. Adding them made it additionally distracting. (The bold didn't help)

Dude that was really short WHY DO YOU PEOPLE WRITE SHORT STORYS AND POEMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DAMN IT. WHEN WILL EVER LEARN WRITERS???????????????????????????? sorry..... Anzius you should stop

Did you write this yourself or did someone else? Does this mean you like it?

Beautiful. It will really benefit this piece.

Why does she have a wild look in her eye? It's very important to inclue detail like that. Also, why did she attract you? Why did she not love you ...

The repitition of "Flowing, Growing" should be changed. Otherwise you're good.

I know. It's absolutely terrible

Jealous? (insert scoff here)

P.S. Why would a vampire let someone like that bully live? He might not kill him in school... but outside is a whole other thing. P.P.S. Twilight stereotype? P.P.P.S. MORE ...