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Re: Under Their Wings; Chapter Three
Good job, I liked it. There was a paragraph that was not spaced at all, and it should have. When you change subjects (character descriptions) Make a new paragraph. I ...
Mar 4, 2008 -
Re: waiting
inkling huh? I Like that. Well, that was vary descriptive, well written, I could probably not write anything that short and that good, so kudos. It kills me when people ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Trapped
That would would sound amazing when it is all arranged, it is hard to tell how it is really supposed to be, not know how fast, the exact style, or ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Hope Springs Eternal
Emo!!!!!!!!! Thanks, now I am going to be depressed. Man! But that was awesome, Great Voc., descriptive, I believed it. My only problem. Hope? she didn't seem very hopeful now. ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: "Lucky Me" Prologue
Interesting, I am familiar with Pandora's box, I even started a rendition of the story. (vary graphic in my account though) I would like to see how this story turns ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Only you
Oh, the words that can urupt from a hartbroken mouth. With such flowidity, do the word spread onto the page of anger, regret, or vengace. So has what has been ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Sixteen
Good, but the poem seems like it was written a little rushed I am sorry, that is just what came to mind. It was good, the only thing I am ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Bonsoir
There were some places where a word was not added to the next line, which kind of threw it off. (Change of topic) Alas! teach me, I have been wanting ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Spilling
It is good, but I found it a little hard to follow. It is one of those poems that you have to read fast to make some of it sound ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: In-House Meditation Device
Right, the poem must have a deep meaning in it, please, :D. It would be an awsome poem, if it were a little easier to understand. You give this to ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: The Human Side of Things
I might be too late for this to be noticed, but I want to comment on it. I Liked this, it shows really well, felling. I Love the way it ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Fame and Fortune
I will do a girl thing here. *stunned* Holy Hell, I loved that, that was beyond amazing. I had no clue that anyone would write a poem on the life ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Search for Seclusion (Temporary Title)
Yay! I get to comment on it first "Yes!" "The sky was overcast, the night was grey, my vision was hazy." Um, The sky was overcast, the night was gray? ...
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Nails and Knives
Good job, that song read just like poetry. Unless it was rap, because rap is not poetry, it is crap. :D Anyways, (sorry for getting off topic there), Bliss is ...
Feb 15, 2008 -
Re: The Movie for Twilight (Part Two)
AAhhhhhhhh! A guy posting on this. Every body run for their lives. hehe. Any ways, that was fun. I haven't read Twilight, I have a few friends who have, and ...
Feb 10, 2008
