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Re: Dagger of Truth (Prologue and Chapter 1 part one)
Hello! I will reviewing your work now :) who want to hunt my friends and me down, and study us, why I don’t know, but it can’t be good. WAY ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: TheDeath
I loved Yoite too, so this literally touched my heart :) It is an excellent piece for your first post :P One thing I would like to point out: You ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: The Bronze Challenges (chapter one)
Excellent job! It was a good thing that you kept it short because a lot of questions rose up in my mind as in how the dad died or where ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Everytime he smiles
Hello! I will be your reviewer :) that I tryed It's actually 'tried'. he greeted , sitting down Yes? No? Maybe? This is only an option :P That's about the ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: The night I died
Hello! I will begin to review your work now :) warning for me to back away , but I was curious I thought it would be a bit better if ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: Kaeru: Part #2
Yet another wonderful piece from you :D I'm not exactly sure if I told you this already, but I have fallen in love with your descriptions and imagery. Keep up ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: A Girl's Life
Hey there! I'll be reviewing your work now :) As she continued to wonder, she could smell that raunchy Calvin Klein perfume, she felt sweat drop onto her body and ...
Aug 19, 2011 -
Re: Delusion
You've left me speechless. The amount of emotion I felt blew me away! One comment: Just like the first reviewer had said, 'evermore' doesn't quite fit, but it kind of ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Kaeru: Part #1
Hi! Okay, first off, great choice for a title. It grabbed my attention just like that :) One comment I have to make is the amount of information you put ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Mirrorself
Hi :) I've got to say this got me hooked. I felt as if it should have been a tad bit longer, but you still got your point out nonetheless. ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Love is Rich-Chapter 2
Hello! It's me again ;) I've found some typo's and stuff, but I can see people already corrected them for you so I'm not going to hound you about it. ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Love is Rich-Chapter 1
Hello! I'm really not good at intros, so I'll just jump to the case, okay? First of all, I felt as if the story could have had more of a ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Animus
Hello, I'll be making a few comments about your wonderful piece :) My suggestions are in bold. Tonight , they were to attack. I just thought that maybe it would ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Can't You Help Me as I'm Starting to Burn?
Hello:D I don't demand. All my comments are suggestions or corrections. The engine was shut off and all noise was eliminated before too much attention could be drawn. I'm not ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: Dear John,
I REALLY enjoyed this :D Maybe you could make it into a book, like as in them sending letters to each other or something. I don't know. It could be ...
Aug 6, 2011
