Published August 30, 2011
You died without leaving a trace.
You suffered, you never wanted to exist, but you also never wanted to die.
You murdered many lives.
You were known as the Death God.
Why did you make me cry?
I am left alone in obscurity.
I cannot tell if you died happily.
I am left in solitude, asking myself
Who were you to me?
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Thank you for the advice. I will make sure to do what you said next time.
I loved Yoite too, so this literally touched my heart
It is an excellent piece for your first post
One thing I would like to point out:
Maybe you could change it into
You suffered.
You never wanted to exist,
But you never wanted to die.
I advise this because that line was too long
I can't wait to hear more from you!
Thank you very much.
That's deep. I like it a lot, and I might think about asking you if I could use a similar version, or this one if it's okay with you in my story. You have one really long line, which may just be your style, but it seems a little out of place. I like this that you have: I have a wild imagination, so don't judge me. I think a ton of people on this site will agree with you on this. Lovely piece of literature you have here.
